Shop names – who invents them, anyway?


Just a quickie, before dashing off to the  ITA conference in Jerusalem:

Several new shops and eateries have recently opened in the center of Rishon LeZion, in the area that used to house the old central bus station. I walk by at least twice a week, making little mental notes to myself on which shop looks inviting, which one I’d like to try.

One corner shop had me mystified before it opened: judging by the neon sign, I couldn’t for the life of me figure out what it was going to sell: notary services?? Highly unlikely.



Until one day, there it was, open for business: another eatery. A sushi bar. Where on earth did they get the idea for the name? I have half a mind to go in and ask them.

For the non-Hebrew speakers among my readers: ‘’gushpanka” comes from Aramaic, and means official seal.

Two doors away is what my folks used to call a rag shop and nowadays goes by the name of fashion boutique. And rather a pretentious one at that. Called Royal, it features a huge chandelier inside that might not look out of place in a fancy ballroom in Versailles.
About two days after it opened, the L in ROYAL went pfft, leaving the neon sign as ROYA. It’s stayed that way ever since, i.e. for weeks. I took the pic at night, and the light of the chandelier was too bright for my iPhone camera to deal with.


As for the selection of clothes inside – definitely more befitting a rag shop than a royal shop: about the same design and quality you’d find in any market stall.

And now, I have to finish packing my rags and be on my way! TTFN.

Reading and writing again, yay!


After two months of reading nothing but work-related [badly-written] texts and depressing news items, and writing nothing but work-related [hopefully well-crafted] texts, plus the occasional personal email and status update on Facebook, I am back to real reading and writing. Yay! I'll hold off with the pat on the back, though, until I make some noticeable progress.

Reading:

Grahame Greene, again. This time: The Comedians. Though I'm supplying a link, it contains spoilers so I don't suggest you read it if you plan on reading the book. It was recommended and lent to me by the admirable Noam Sheizaf . Admirable for many reasons, not merely the fact that he's the father of Baby Momo [see pic at end of post], though that of course is a huge feather in his cap, not that he often wears one. "It's like all Grahame Greene novels," Noam warned me. And so it is. The preface itself, pages 5-6, is worth far-more-than its weight in gold. The first two pages had me already rushing to Google/Wikipedia three times, to look up The Tontons Macoute, "Exegi monumentum",  and pompes funebres, considerably broadening my general knowledge. And by page 23 I felt an overwhelming need to go back to page 1 and start over, in order to get the pieces of the puzzle straight in my mind, and make sure I was picking up on all the hints.
Okay, so it's going to have a heart-rending end – you know that as soon as you read that Jones is dead (Chapter 1, 5th line, not exactly a spoiler). What else is new. But it is oh-so-gooood!

Writing:

He/she, or they?

I've been watching episodes of Steven Fry's fascinating series Planet Word . Highly recommend for people in love with language. Or with Fry. Or both. Fry, whose vocabulary is immense, and who must be one of the better users of the English language, seems quite open to change and willing to accept new words, new status of old words, and new usage of existing words, not to mention changes in grammatically accepted structures. In fact, to him, the vitality and constant evolution of language is a thrilling thing in itself.

Shouldn't we translators and editors be more like him? Less sticklers for stiff grammar-and-usage rules, and more open to creative use of language?

In our personal lives, yes, sure. In our daily work we can't always afford to. While you or I may approve of the way your client expresses herself – be she a university prof preparing a paper for publication or a shop owner preparing an ad for the weekend local magazine – you have to keep your target audience in mind. Not all readers will understand or appreciate your client's usage.

The other day my friend L. sent me the following question:

"…So I finally found the time to finish up this really interesting academic article, and something really bothers me. He [the client] keeps mixing "their" with the singular. E.g.:
"This naturally increases one’s commitment to their faith and the group."

I keep correcting him, and I have explained to him that social convention (gender consideration) aside, he can't bend the grammar rules. Am I right to insist? I told him it had to be 
"This naturally increases one’s commitment to his or her faith and the group." [you can also use either one of the pronouns, but it must be singular]  

Am I right?"

Grammatically, of course she's right. But usage-wise, we can't help it, things change. Attitudes change and the language changes with it.

As it happens, in a recent job I was grappling with the same question. I was translating a booklet from Hebrew to English, and it was full of general descriptions of things people say and do, which, in English, required the use of "he/she", or "they", or "one", or "people". Constantly having to choose between these solutions got really tiresome. So I was tempted to use "their", but my inner grammarian balked...

I recalled that the problem cropped up on the Chicago Manual of Style forum, and after some searching, found it online:
Q. I would swear that I saw a reference in your manual that approved of the use of “their” instead of a gender-biased singular pronoun. For example, “If the user has completed installing the program, they should put the CD-ROM back in the package,” instead of “If the user has completed installing the program, s/he should put the CD-ROM back in the package,” but on your Q&A, you dance around the answer to the question and suggest that you do NOT approve of the singular “their.” Can you tell us what is acceptable?
A. Yes, you saw it at 2.98 (note 9) in the fourteenth edition, but there was some regret at having written it, and we decided to abandon the idea for the fifteenth and sixteenth editions. Though some writers are comfortable with the occasional use of they as a singular pronoun, some are not, and it is better to do the necessary work to recast a sentence or, other options having been exhausted, use he or she. For a fuller discussion of this issue, see paragraph 5.223 in CMOS 16 and the entry for “he or she” under the “Glossary of Problematic Words and Phrases” at paragraph 5.220.
[Copyright: The Chicago Manual of Style]

Bottom line? Suit yourself...

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 As promised, a pic of Noam with Baby Momo:


How to deal with copywriting for competing clients


How many ways are there to say "this cream will do wonders for you complexion"?
Let me count the ways…
Or better yet, let's not.

Since becoming self-employed, some six years ago, I was approached several times by skincare, toiletries and cosmetics companies to translate their blurb, do copywriting, edit their texts, and so on.

Initially, it was fun. I liked doing the research: going to the drugstore, studying the labels on jars and bottles; reading pretty brochures, and getting samples of lovely scented concoctions.

Actually writing copy was more difficult, psychologically at least. As much as I like my own favorite toiletries, I disapprove in principle of the huge industry that sells illusions to women. You know – all those "promises in a jar" – don't remember which beauty mogul coined that excellent phrase. Though I rather enjoyed the PR & Advertising course I took in my late twenties, I did not last long as a freelance copywriter. With youthful idealism, I felt I was wasting my time and talent on an unworthy goal: What, waste time and creative effort on persuading people to buy Lotion A rather than Lotion B?! How trivial!
Yet here I was, decades later, doing precisely that. Shame on me.

One such project was a mite more "convincing" than others. The company head, with a degree in chemistry, sounded very sincere when he explained that his products were based on organically grown plants in sustainable environments, and that for this and other reasons they were ecologically sound, and any person could use them with a clear conscience.  I wrote a deeply-caring text. That was before the full-fledged organic craze, years before every other toiletry product claimed to be organic and therefore automatically good and healthy.

Fast-forward.
Rivers of lotion later, I found myself dealing with three different manufacturers of skincare products. Possibly because it's been established that I've done this sort of work before. Now, suddenly, I am lost for words. Yes, I have a little list. It's called "skincare words.doc" and it currently has sixty-odd entries. But it's of little help. Because all creams and lotions claim to do the same things. They all hydrate, calm, soothe, give you a radiant, glowing complexion, bla bla bla, and so on and so forth. I suppose the trick is to give them alluring new names, inventing words and adjectives along the way. Some companies give their products incredibly long names. Others – like Clinique – go in for puns, like Take The Day Off. I rather like that approach; inject a bit of humor into the green jar or bottle.

Oops, I've strayed from my topic, which was how to deal with different copy for clients with similar products.

Briefly, it's a question of finding a slightly different focus; of addressing a slightly different target audience, if possible; and creating a different image.
Just recently, I translated marketing texts for two competing senior residence chains. The copywriters for the two chains chose a completely different tack:
Copywriter A emphasized the services provided, the experience of the staff, the size of the rooms and the view from the window, if any.
Copywriter B emphasized the social aspect: a place where you'll make new friends, turn a new leaf, find new love and be happy.
But what if the same copywriter were hired by the two competing chains? Could he have done justice to both?...
I guess it depends on the "brief" – on the instructions and guidelines given to the copywriter by the client.

Okay, I finished venting about this topic. No one is forcing me to undertake such jobs. I'll do my best for the current project, then give it a rest.